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To Sweet For The World To Own by ~NINTheFragile:iconNINTheFragile:

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torn by her own will
she falls apart now
sent to repair her injury's
they put on the crown
bleeding and broken
she sits on her thrown
waiting to be known
by all those that throw the stones
she loves them all
and just wishes for there love and care
but all they can do is laugh and stare
i tell her "they scar you dont you see"
but she just turns away from me
just to go to the evil ones
to try to make amends
bandaging the broken pieces
as they fall apart again
bleeding again
she sees her fate is coming to its end
as she tries her last atempt
they spit in her face again
and all thats left of her memory
her misery
is the grave she rest in with all her grace
©2003-2009 ~NINTheFragile
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this is a sad little writing i made a few min ago... hope you like it... thx for reading.

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`Munkee1 Oct 21, 2003, 5:56:25 PM
Very good! I really like this a lot. Flow is good, you have conveyed a depressed feeling that sinks in deep to the reader. Great use of emotion.

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~NINTheFragile Oct 21, 2003, 5:59:35 PM
thx much :D your gallerys very nice... like the darker dawnish type look to some of them... oh yea... and chris cornell is awsome ;)... my fav vocalist and song writer

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"Feel the breath slip away from the lung and let life fly away on its broken wings"
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`Munkee1 Oct 21, 2003, 6:04:41 PM
Well, you are quite welcome, and thanks back at ya! Damn Straight CC Rocks!

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~sian22 Oct 21, 2003, 6:41:21 PM
Another greta poem, nice flow and great use of words, is a bit sad -_- Great work
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~NINTheFragile Oct 21, 2003, 6:58:01 PM
thx much :D

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"Feel the breath slip away from the lung and let life fly away on its broken wings"
-NINTheFragile-
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*pkbitch Oct 22, 2003, 4:17:39 PM
I love this :) the flow is fantastic, and you have a great gift when it comes to wording

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~NINTheFragile Oct 22, 2003, 4:25:29 PM
thank you very much glad you enjoyed my writings :D...

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"Feel the breath slip away from the lung and let life fly away on its broken wings"
-NINTheFragile-
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~srchin4soulz Oct 22, 2003, 7:12:09 PM
Reminds me a bit of some of my stuff... I really enjoyed this poem... "she" is very Christlike in the sense that her heart went out to those who abused her. I am guessing you had no thoughts of that.. but I just got that from this... I took something a little different away from this and it changed a little part of me... I realized that we may walk through life with our faith in full blow but still we may be persecuted by the people we care for most. Okay.. lol.. i'll shut up now.. I think too indepth sometimes... *note to self~ CASSIE JUST ENJOY THE DARN POEM!!!*

:D Good job man.. you got my mind going!
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~NINTheFragile Oct 22, 2003, 7:13:45 PM
thx... glad you enjoyed... :D

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