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I am complacent in this moment while staring into your eyes
You eyes look like the sun with green rays of glorious light
The smile on your face does warm my heart and calms this hate
You make me forget the worst, you make me want to stay

When I looked into your eyes the first time I saw the future, Our lives
With just one glimpse I was lost into this world, like a portal of time
You asked me if I was alright and I just smiled and said I was fine
Little did you know that in that moment I was yours  for all time

Your eyes do shift colors as your mood and seasons change
Like leaves on a flower always evolving except with no decay
I am lost in this moment with my love and watching her fall to sleep
You gave me life, gave me love, you gave me this key forever I will keep
©2008-2009 ~NINTheFragile
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:iconpauldapro:
Very sweet and touching but what kinda bothered me was that you used time twice in one stanza to rhyme. Just constructive criticism, but it's still a very good poem
:iconcyre:
Of course I like the last line the best.

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"To Dream by Day is to be cognizant of many things which escape those who merely dream by night"
-Poe
:iconbladegrasp:
Wow NIN writing love poetry! Fantastic :nod:


I think this is really good, straightforward and simple without complex words and all that fluff. I like the imagery of watching her go to sleep. I think that all "good guys" want that moment with the right girl at one time or another.

See, out of your gallery I like your true love poetry the best~

Great work~!!!

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See you've got to fall in love and marry a woman who combats your overwhelming love with her own by coming up with new ways to make -you- happy! Doesn't that make sense? Then when you go crazy, you go crazy together...crazy in love...

~Cyre
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Yea I wrote the first in the series along time again I think this was the 3rd one I cant remember.. but in general I was satisfied with the out put... I wrote this after seeing my girlfriend after a long time not seeing her... I thought it would be good enough inspiration to write something romantic...

Im glad you liked it...

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"Feel the breath slip away from the lung and let life fly away on its broken wings"
-NINTheFragile-
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I most definitely did~


Keep them coming :work:

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See you've got to fall in love and marry a woman who combats your overwhelming love with her own by coming up with new ways to make -you- happy! Doesn't that make sense? Then when you go crazy, you go crazy together...crazy in love...

~Cyre

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